I decided that in order to make my thriller opening successful I needed to make a first draft and then collect opinions from my target audience which I did:
Jane (age 35) said- "It's looking really good, your ideas that you wanted to get across are portrayed really well at the beginning with the use of slow pacing, and the non- diegetic sounds really add to the tension and from the off make the scene very uncomfortable for the watchers".
Megan (age 23) said- "That's good! I think it tells the story really well just within the first few minutes and helps set the tone for the rest of the film. It is a very believable and interesting concept one that I personally haven't seen before which would be a major contributing factor as to why I really want to see the full film now, another great aspect was that not too much was given away, like at the end, does he just pass out? Does he die? Does she get caught? I want to see more".
Mr Welch (teacher feedback) said- "A really good idea which you have pulled off effectively. A good range of shots and a strong sense of narrative without issuing a single word. Some suggestions: add in the ident what you spent so long making in after effects, add some more titles, too long spent on the party montage scene, try and cut that down and see if you can add some subtle music for tension around 1.44".
I took all this feedback on board and my final copy is now finished! It will be uploaded soon so keep your eyes pealed! Hope you enjoy.
